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Xander looked at the demonic figure which was looking at him. His face was asymetrical, like a painting by an abstract artist. As was his body. His arms and eyes were one opposing sides of his body. Both of them, arms on the right and eyes on the left. His mouth going vertical instead of horizontal.
"You want to give me this Ring of Truth thing? Which makes anything I would say or write while wearing it come true? Now, just saying this thing works... Why give it to me? What not just use it your self?" asked the Mr. Harris as he realized the power of the ring.
"I'm a Chaos demon, and as a Xaos demon, I want random mayhem more then massive destruction. You kid have the power to stir of Kaos, even if it's more of the kind to help people then to hurt people. Plus I don't have a soul and can't use it.
However, if you don't want it, I can go. Perhaps some one with soul who likes the evil kind of chaos would like to have an object of ultimate power..." spoke the Khaos demon, as he held the gold and amethyst ring.
"Okay, Okay. I'll take it.. as long as it doesn't cost my soul or something." said Xander, being nervous of such deals with knowing demons are real.
"Nope, just watching you try to control yourself with such power is going to be reward for me. Going to laugh my freakin ass off for centuries to come, Mr. Harris." said the Demon as he slipped the ring on Xander's right pinkie as the ring turned into a pinkie ring in appearance.
Then with a ripple and a burst of... freshly baked bread scent... the demon was gone and Xander had the ring.
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XFAN - 3/7/2014 5:11 PM
I'm aware of the differences, including Uranus/Neptune not being cousins, I honestly used the Americanized name because Lita is easier to type a dozen times. Ami is phonetically the same in both versions so it wasn't obvious.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:36 PM
However, it is your story, so you can do what you want. I just thought I should at least let you know.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:34 PM
One other thing. When (or even if you plan to use them), Haruka/Uranus and Neptune/Michiru are NOT cousins. In fact they are a lesbian couple! Wasn't sure if you knew that or not. But thought you might have fun with a chapter with them.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:32 PM
For the others; Venus is Minako, Moon is Usagi, Mars is Rei, Saturn is Hotaru, Chibi Moon is Chibi-Usa, Uranus is Haruka, Neptune is Michiru, and Pluto is Setsuna.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:29 PM
Love the new chapter, but I only have 1 problem with it. That is, that you used Jupiter's Americanized name. He original Japanese name is Makoto.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:36 AM
Will do, thanks for letting me know.
C.King - 3/7/2014 10:32 AM
Grimmer. The wall is for quick non-permanent communication. For longer and permanent, like hashing out stories, use the message board.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:19 AM
C. King, one more thing since I can't seem to get the hang of PM's for this site. Anyway, I'm in this till the end of the story if you're up for it.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:01 AM
Basically have the story end with Diana, Bruce, and their harem happy and content with the Master PC vanishing to another universe once it's work is done.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:01 AM
I don't want Diana to be too corrupted by the Master PC, just a general lowering of what inhibitions she has. Maybe have some guilt that Bruce helps her overcome as they near the end of their harem building.
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