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"Oooo, look at those platforms!" Barbie tried to stay in control, but those boots looked so exciting!
"Those are pretty tall for a little thing like you," Selina said as she inspected the sparkling purple boots. "I guess you want to seem a little bigger, huh?"
Barbie blushed. "T-they're pretty."
"Well, I do like the idea of you teetering along on those stilts. Besides, I don't think I can refuse a cutie like you anything."
Barbie blushed. She was trying to remain as Batman as possible, but it was so nice to have nice things said about her, especially by someone who was buying her pretty things!
"Ooo, let's get some matching outfits for our girls," Selina said. "Like Catholic schoolgirl outfits and French maids."
"That's sooo much fun!" Lois giggled. "What do you think, Chrissie?"
Chrissie blushed. It sounded humiliating, but also kinda sexy. "Um-- eeeep!"
"Sorry," Lois chuckled. "I just can't keep my hands off your cute tushy!"
"Hmmm, maybe we should get a third opinion," Selina said. "Hey, Stephanie, isn't it?"
"Yes, Ms. Kyle?"
"Would you mind if our girls modeled some looks for you? We could do with some feedback."
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XFAN - 3/7/2014 5:11 PM
I'm aware of the differences, including Uranus/Neptune not being cousins, I honestly used the Americanized name because Lita is easier to type a dozen times. Ami is phonetically the same in both versions so it wasn't obvious.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:36 PM
However, it is your story, so you can do what you want. I just thought I should at least let you know.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:34 PM
One other thing. When (or even if you plan to use them), Haruka/Uranus and Neptune/Michiru are NOT cousins. In fact they are a lesbian couple! Wasn't sure if you knew that or not. But thought you might have fun with a chapter with them.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:32 PM
For the others; Venus is Minako, Moon is Usagi, Mars is Rei, Saturn is Hotaru, Chibi Moon is Chibi-Usa, Uranus is Haruka, Neptune is Michiru, and Pluto is Setsuna.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:29 PM
Love the new chapter, but I only have 1 problem with it. That is, that you used Jupiter's Americanized name. He original Japanese name is Makoto.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:36 AM
Will do, thanks for letting me know.
C.King - 3/7/2014 10:32 AM
Grimmer. The wall is for quick non-permanent communication. For longer and permanent, like hashing out stories, use the message board.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:19 AM
C. King, one more thing since I can't seem to get the hang of PM's for this site. Anyway, I'm in this till the end of the story if you're up for it.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:01 AM
Basically have the story end with Diana, Bruce, and their harem happy and content with the Master PC vanishing to another universe once it's work is done.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:01 AM
I don't want Diana to be too corrupted by the Master PC, just a general lowering of what inhibitions she has. Maybe have some guilt that Bruce helps her overcome as they near the end of their harem building.
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