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Quentin Quire rolled his eyes as soon as Ms Guthrie turned around to accentuate a word choice in the Dickens passage she was reading from. He'd been bored stiff the whole hour, having already lifted any interesting insights Husk might have about the subject
from her mind before the class even began. Usually he got admonished for that, but Rachel Grey seemed to be otherwise focused this afternoon. As a result, he got to sit in a room with 30 mindless drones, his 'fellow students' and listen to a hillbilly girl
act like she knew about literature, otherwise Wolverine or Captain America or Giant Man or someone would lobotomise him. Because he dared to speak out, to disagree, to tell the truth and, with a little telepathic... nudging, convince the rank and file to join
He turned and took in the one good thing about the new Jean Grey School. Idie. The heat manipulating girl had a curious self-loathing that should've disgusted Kid Omega, but her beauty outshone that. By which he was perfectly willing to admit that he was overlooking
her issues because she was hot in ways other than her powers! Which got him thinking. If sex could even warp his own immense, focused intellect to bypass it's normal logic, maybe the stuck-up fascists who ran things were the same. Maybe his revolution should
focus on the social, not the political change that was needed!
Later, Quire snuck into Hank McCoy's lab, having pilfered the codes and disarming protocols from a sleeping Toad. It was common knowledge than Beast was an Avenger, but didn't go on 'official' missions for them, which had piqued Quentin's interest. At first,
just because it was a sign of government interference and obstruction, but then because he reasoned a scientist of Dr McCoy's calibre must be needed on covert missions to examine sensitive materials. The kind that might make the coming change easier to affect.
And then he saw it. A sliver of something he'd read about. Not as impressive as having the whole thing, but with his own prodigious mental powers behind it... A shard of the Cosmic Cube, splintered off when Bucky Barnes was returned from his conditioned fugue,
would be just the thing. All he had to do was reach past the forcefield and... take it!
His fingers closed around it before the silent alarms went off, and his skin buzzed with the raw power...
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XFAN - 3/7/2014 5:11 PM
I'm aware of the differences, including Uranus/Neptune not being cousins, I honestly used the Americanized name because Lita is easier to type a dozen times. Ami is phonetically the same in both versions so it wasn't obvious.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:36 PM
However, it is your story, so you can do what you want. I just thought I should at least let you know.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:34 PM
One other thing. When (or even if you plan to use them), Haruka/Uranus and Neptune/Michiru are NOT cousins. In fact they are a lesbian couple! Wasn't sure if you knew that or not. But thought you might have fun with a chapter with them.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:32 PM
For the others; Venus is Minako, Moon is Usagi, Mars is Rei, Saturn is Hotaru, Chibi Moon is Chibi-Usa, Uranus is Haruka, Neptune is Michiru, and Pluto is Setsuna.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:29 PM
Love the new chapter, but I only have 1 problem with it. That is, that you used Jupiter's Americanized name. He original Japanese name is Makoto.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:36 AM
Will do, thanks for letting me know.
C.King - 3/7/2014 10:32 AM
Grimmer. The wall is for quick non-permanent communication. For longer and permanent, like hashing out stories, use the message board.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:19 AM
C. King, one more thing since I can't seem to get the hang of PM's for this site. Anyway, I'm in this till the end of the story if you're up for it.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:01 AM
Basically have the story end with Diana, Bruce, and their harem happy and content with the Master PC vanishing to another universe once it's work is done.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:01 AM
I don't want Diana to be too corrupted by the Master PC, just a general lowering of what inhibitions she has. Maybe have some guilt that Bruce helps her overcome as they near the end of their harem building.
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