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As Jimmy sat back in his chair, he was startled when a sweet female voice whispered huskily in his ear, saying "Hi, Jimmy."
Jimmy spun around, to be confronted by Death of the Endless, even lovelier in person, clad in a black-belly shirt, low-slung black jeans that looked painted on, and a silver ankh necklace. The outfit exposed vast amounts of pale flesh and emphasized her perfectly
lithe body, but it didn't come off as slutty. And to complete the look her lovely face bore that same astonishingly gorgeous smile.
"Th-that was fast," Jimmy panted, startled. Death looked apologetic.
"I'm sorry, I didn't mean to startle you. I don't get many clients in this job, especially not ones as important as you, Jimmy. So, I came as soon as I could. Was I too soon?"
Jimmy couldn't bear to see her looking upset. "No, not at all," he said, reassuringly. "Uhm, I also called some other girls...that doesn't bother you, does it?"
She smiled that awesome smile again. "Not at all, you're the client, if you want it, I'm good with it."
Her smile was infectious, and Jimmy couldn't help smiling right back at her. "That's really great. Ah, anyways, I called some other girls..."
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XFAN - 3/7/2014 5:11 PM
I'm aware of the differences, including Uranus/Neptune not being cousins, I honestly used the Americanized name because Lita is easier to type a dozen times. Ami is phonetically the same in both versions so it wasn't obvious.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:36 PM
However, it is your story, so you can do what you want. I just thought I should at least let you know.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:34 PM
One other thing. When (or even if you plan to use them), Haruka/Uranus and Neptune/Michiru are NOT cousins. In fact they are a lesbian couple! Wasn't sure if you knew that or not. But thought you might have fun with a chapter with them.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:32 PM
For the others; Venus is Minako, Moon is Usagi, Mars is Rei, Saturn is Hotaru, Chibi Moon is Chibi-Usa, Uranus is Haruka, Neptune is Michiru, and Pluto is Setsuna.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:29 PM
Love the new chapter, but I only have 1 problem with it. That is, that you used Jupiter's Americanized name. He original Japanese name is Makoto.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:36 AM
Will do, thanks for letting me know.
C.King - 3/7/2014 10:32 AM
Grimmer. The wall is for quick non-permanent communication. For longer and permanent, like hashing out stories, use the message board.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:19 AM
C. King, one more thing since I can't seem to get the hang of PM's for this site. Anyway, I'm in this till the end of the story if you're up for it.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:01 AM
Basically have the story end with Diana, Bruce, and their harem happy and content with the Master PC vanishing to another universe once it's work is done.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:01 AM
I don't want Diana to be too corrupted by the Master PC, just a general lowering of what inhibitions she has. Maybe have some guilt that Bruce helps her overcome as they near the end of their harem building.
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