BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by ESchorcho - 5/1/2017 4:47 PM

Colleem and anyone else who might be interested in adding to the BLISS Pleasure Cruise storyline, here are some thoughts on the story going forward.  I'd like to know if anyone else has any ideas for it as well.

I will write a chapter hopefully soon dealing with Storm and Kitty leaving the mansion.  There also needs to be a bit where Pepper comes to from her time watching the video and then begins to put the pressure on Tony to go on vacation with her.  Something will happen where he won't be able to go and Pepper 'decides' to go alone.  This is of course the subliminals making her book the trip on BLISS for her alone.
So Kitty, Storm and Pepper will all be on the cruise together.  Now, I don't know what to do with Mary Jane at this stage.  Any ideas.  Is there anything else anyone would like to see happen?


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by C.King - 5/1/2017 5:40 PM

 I just hope that Peter/Spidey isn't turned into a woman or has a woobie cuckolding. Cause that seems to be the story of many porn/addventure/etc stories. Especially when MJ becomes a selfish slut. So at least something which isn't just humiliation and/or de-maning for him.


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by JimmyKasche - 5/1/2017 8:59 PM

have him busy with Gwen, Felicia and/or Cindy as a consolation of BLISS needing his wife? :P 


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by C.King - 5/1/2017 9:07 PM

Or perhaps both a female/females being controlled to control/serve Peter so they can use his brain/powers/connections?


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by ESchorcho - 5/1/2017 9:36 PM

Both are good ideas.  I think that Max, the CEO of BLISS, would not want to bring any unwanted attention on his little operation regarding Tony Stark or Peter Parker.  Both are heavy hitters in the superhero world.  I can see him having Mary Jane be the best wife she can be throughout this.  Colleem, I know that doesn't leave a lot for her to do with the exception of her sneaking off for other recruitment trips.

And C.King, I don't plan on Peter being turned into a woman or anything like that.  Frankly, in stories like this where that isn't part of the plot I find when those types of elements are brought in it kills the narrative.  If that does happen I will ignore that chapter.


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by C.King - 5/1/2017 10:06 PM

The fact is Peter is going to be curious in most cases of what his wife is doing if they break up/divorce given his life. Unless he is distracted. You have Mary Jane in her Mara Joe's identity hypnotizing people... why not secretly hypnotize Peter to lead him away from her as she is being moved from him. Into another woman's arms (Black Cat, Silk, Silver Sable, someone else like a villainess, heroine, celebrity, etc...), with Max's permission. Just an idea...


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by ESchorcho - 5/1/2017 10:10 PM

That is good.  Maybe Mary Jane can arrive on the cruise line at some point and begs Max to let her get a divorce.  Max would need some coaxing but they could come up with the plan for her to have the subliminal be implanted in their apartment.  Colleem, how does this sound since you wanted to write some Mary Jane stuff?  It would happen down the line though I'm thinking, although that doesn't mean she can't go on more recruiting trips between now and then.


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by colleem - 5/1/2017 11:48 PM

Sounds good for later. First question I have. 

Does bliss know who she really married? It would be fun if they have no idea that Peter is spidey. 
For now I am not able to write something in my usual bad length (or usual bad English ??) so I can't say when it would be finished. But ideas are growing. Would be centered around pepper pots and Peter / mj at home just story no sex


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by C.King - 5/2/2017 7:47 AM

 Given Mara Joe has all of Mary Jane's memories and is slavishly devoted to Max, he should know. No proof in the fic, but the logical conclusion is yes. It's Mary Jane who has no memory of Mara Joe.


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by colleem - 5/2/2017 8:00 AM

From this point of view yes. On the other side they just wanted a beautiful woman that isn't world class model that everyone knows. 

So why should they ask a woman from new york if she is with some super hero. If they asked her she would have said it but what if they never asked her? 


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by ESchorcho - 5/2/2017 8:14 AM

C.King, so you think that Mary Jane doesn't know she has this Mara Joe identity?  That kind of contradicts my chapter of her in the penthouse.

Also, now that we are discussing the storyline on here I feel I should saw that it is taking a while to get on board the actual ship with characters we all know.  That is why I've written the step-mother/daughter plot to give a preview of things to come.


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by C.King - 5/2/2017 8:18 AM

Sorry, I figure that was the growing Mara Joe persona. From the chapter and the one a couple back, it seemed Mara was a secondary personality which was growing/taking over Mary Jane's life. Having all of the memories, while Mary Jane is unknown of everything. Unless you are saying Mara Joe is all that remains...


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by ESchorcho - 5/2/2017 8:23 AM

I thought Mara Joe was an alias, but it could be put in there that this side of her is growing.  Maybe that could be why she goes from having this double life but comes home to Peter to begging Max for a divorce.  That could work well.  What do you think?


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by colleem - 5/2/2017 8:37 AM

I also thought that Mara was a new personality that was imprinted on the real mj. When they need their agent mj goes to sleep and the loyal Mara takes over. While Mara is aware of all that mj does it is so that mj has no idea of what happens. This would be the perfect agent. 


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by ESchorcho - 5/2/2017 9:44 AM

OK, I will have to retcon some stuff going forward.  No big deal.  It's still the same person.  This is why the message board is so great for storytelling like this.  I do like the idea that the Mara Joe side is growing and eventually takes over fully.


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by colleem - 5/2/2017 10:49 AM

Aye even if there are better possibilities to talk about it ^^ :)I have now a few Ideas and would write a new chapter about Pepper and MJ if this is okay?


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by ESchorcho - 5/2/2017 11:25 AM

Go ahead.  I'll handle Storm and Kitty leaving the mansion.


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by colleem - 5/3/2017 1:38 PM

I posted a quick Mara/Mary Chapter. Hope you like it. Nothing big and just a bit story


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by C.King - 5/3/2017 1:46 PM

You said English is not your native language so it was good even with mistakes... like Lap and Lab. Also depends on your writing tool. Also it's Felicia Hardy, not Felicity. But it is close, and her daughter's name in MC2.


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by colleem - 5/3/2017 1:47 PM

Thanks :) I will correct it


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by colleem - 5/3/2017 1:52 PM

I hope it is still understandable what i mean and not to hard to read :)


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by JimmyKasche - 5/3/2017 8:13 PM

I understood it fine... really enjoyable chapter and I look forward to where this story is going :)


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by ESchorcho - 5/11/2017 3:15 PM

Good chapter, C.King.  I'll take the next chapter.


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by C.King - 5/11/2017 3:26 PM

I was going to make it a Celebrity Crews... but with V.I.P We can have heroes like Storm, business like Pepper, Models like Mara Jo, and any famous person you want.


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by ESchorcho - 5/11/2017 8:43 PM

Some celebrities would be great to be given the BLISS treatment.  I will hopefully have a chapter written tomorrow which will get us finally on the ship with the characters we all know.  Then the real fun can begin.


RE: BLISS Pleasure Cruise

by ESchorcho - 1/5/2018 1:06 PM

I caught the BLISS storyline up to the point where I think the Mara Joe and Felicia plot matches up with the rest of the characters.  Let me know what you think and if anyone wants to add to it, please do.  I just ask that you try to follow the story options.  Hope you like it!


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JimmyKasche - 8/19/2018 8:01 PM
Hey Anzaleth is back... and decided which universe for Bimburg... DC it is then :P
ESchorcho - 8/19/2018 8:22 AM
Jimmy, the Bimburg story looks like a lot of fun. I'll try to add to it when I can but I can't wait to see where it goes!
zahnskye - 8/19/2018 4:03 AM
Sorry I haven't been around much either. Been dedicating all my free-time to writing my novels.
colleem - 8/19/2018 3:44 AM
i can´t wait to see the finish in my old story Mastermind :) Great Work Solar :) I see something big is coming
JimmyKasche - 8/18/2018 11:42 PM
anyone want to help my Bimburg story... go ahead I've been debating between DC or Marvel... I mean the obvious then would be DC/Marvel mix... but that seems kinda cheating <_<
Gorel - 8/18/2018 4:10 PM
Had my hands full too, been busy with work.
ESchorcho - 8/17/2018 4:53 PM
* too busy to write.
ESchorcho - 8/17/2018 9:57 AM
I've been good but too bust to write. Hopefully that changes soon.
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Got quiet here. How's everyone doing?
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@Lakemanjon03 You made some wonderful chapters and left very good ideas for future



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