Sue Storms Secret Life - Supervillain Groupie

by CorruptionCentral - 8/9/2014 5:38 PM

Well, apparently either no one read or no one liked my last addition to that story. If anyone did read it please let me know, whether good or bad, you thought of it. Just looking for feedback to better hit my audience.

If you're interested, I want to expand on the group I created, the Muses of Mayhem. I think we could do interesting things with them. My current idea is to have their queen make the two Sue met release her from her deal with them so the heroine could be used by the muses to inspire the Frightful Four to new heights.
Thanks for any time and assistance provided.


RE: Sue Storms Secret Life - Supervillain Groupie

by colleem - 8/10/2014 6:03 AM

I have red it :) I like the way you work with her thoughts. But i dont know how or why she would work with the henchmen in front of the club when she is on her way to the bosses. 


RE: Sue Storms Secret Life - Supervillain Groupie

by CorruptionCentral - 8/10/2014 7:49 AM

Colleem, thanks for responding. In writing this chapter I made the assumption that readers had some familiarity with 'the bar with no name' and maybe that was a big assumption. In case you aren't familiar, 'The bar with no name' is a place referred to and occasionally shown in Marvel comics that caters solely to heavy hitter villains. You'll never see a Magneto or Doctor Doom there, but the Wreaking Crew, Frightful Four, and their ilk are definitely regulars.  The place also seems to move regularly with no explanation of how or how the client can always find it but not the authorities.

After Sue has been treated with the Personality Disguiser and the subsequent thought scrub process the remove the groupie personality only embeds the groupie mindset permanently into her real personality, she discovers where the bar will be, but since it moves often, her information will only be good for a few days (putting her under additional time pressure).  When she sees the thugs outside the bar, she expects them to be the bouncers (which in fact they are at that time) who will only allow know criminals in, so she expects she will have to deal with them if she wants in.  
So, to answer your question, the groupie mindset has already severely impacted Sue's judgement in that she is seeking out her obsession. The closer she gets to realizing her fantasy, the stronger her obsession and the more impacted are her judgement, ethics, and morals.  Add to that to achieve her first plan (and to date the only one she's been able to come up with in her current mental state where she has more in common with Harley Quinn than the Invisible Woman) she must get these thugs to let her into the bar. She knows she only has a day or two tops before the bar moves again and she will have to start from scratch. in addition, her family will be back within a week so her odds of success without detection are dwindling fast. All that time pressure and the building need of her obsession is why she deals with them.


RE: Sue Storms Secret Life - Supervillain Groupie

by colleem - 8/10/2014 8:29 AM

I understand the pressure she has. The time is working against her but you mentioned right the Person i thought of. Harley Quinn. She is in my view the most "famous" groupie... but she would just have used brute force to get in. The thugs only let villains inside and fear that she could be a cop. Sure. But if Susan would beat them up or even kill one in a mistake... they would let her in. And Susan would have to deal with the fact that she had maybe killed someone or at least put them all into the next clinic. 

Maybe this would be enough to heal her from her obsession but on the other side. She could build up a mental link between Violence and the Obsession. 


RE: Sue Storms Secret Life - Supervillain Groupie

by CorruptionCentral - 8/10/2014 10:25 AM

I see your point and frankly I have always seen that the violence reaction is quite possible and will eventually be an accepted reaction for Sue. Right now I see her as still in the phase where she is rationalizing her addictive behavior. Since she has already conceded that she must have sex with the objects of her obsession, which is obviously cheating on her husband (who she is already building quite a grudge against for opposing the Frightful Four as well as standing in the way of her dreams) and betraying her family (who she also resents for standing in her was and will soon start to hate) fucking anyone else to get what she needs is just going to be like mental masturbation while she imagines its one of the Frightful Four screwing her.  

In other words, she is well on the way to madness, but hasn't completely jumped into it yet, so she still has some resistance to violent crime... For now.


RE: Sue Storms Secret Life - Supervillain Groupie

by solddate - 8/10/2014 11:18 AM

Just though I'd pipe up and say I've really enjoyed your Groupie line so far Corrupt , just as we discussed is the pornstar idea that gets my mind ticking, but unfortunately not nearly as smoothly as yours does. The ideas you've put forward are very interesting and I'm definitely interested to see how the Muses direct Sue. 

I can definitely see the logic she's following in trying to reach her obsession, essentially anything goes if it enables her to reach the Frightful Four without the rest of world finding out. I wouldn't mind seeing the gravity of her actions hitting her when she finally gets to the point of fucking one of the members before it all being washed in her euphoria.


RE: Sue Storms Secret Life - Supervillain Groupie

by CorruptionCentral - 8/10/2014 7:24 PM

SoldDate, C. King, and Colleem, thank you very much for your input.  I appreciate your time and comments.  I think  know what I want to do next and will post it soon.  Thanks again


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ESchorcho - 8/19/2017 10:56 AM
GAV, I loved your chapters. The storyline has a lot of potential. As for ruleradvent's addition, I'm confused. Don't get me wrong, it was well written but it doesn't seem to flow from the other chapters. Am I missing something?
gothamalleyviper - 8/18/2017 1:52 PM
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Gorel - 8/17/2017 7:17 AM
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exidor455 - 8/15/2017 8:27 AM
No prob ESchorcho - just laying out some options for where things could go next. I hope you get time to write something soon. :)
ESchorcho - 8/15/2017 6:25 AM
Thanks for adding to the Mephisto storyline, exidor455 and great work! I'll try to work on chapters coming up here. I've been pretty busy recently but will try to write something for it.
exidor455 - 8/15/2017 1:28 AM
I'm having a go at getting SSSL/Mephisto moving again. :)
colleem - 8/13/2017 1:36 AM
@King :) Everything works here (execpt the Homepage itself^^) The only wish i had would be a writer that puts some effort into the Story. Background length character depth and so on :)
exidor455 - 8/12/2017 6:07 PM
Sorry Ruleradvent, I was a bit shitty there. But I hate non-chapters. If you're going to write something, write something. :)



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