by CorruptionCentral - 8/9/2014 5:38 PM
Well, apparently either no one read or no one liked my last addition to that story. If anyone did read it please let me know, whether good or bad, you thought of it. Just looking for feedback to better hit my audience.
If you're interested, I want to expand on the group I created, the Muses of Mayhem. I think we could do interesting things with them. My current idea is to have their queen make the two Sue met release her from her deal with them so the heroine could be used by the muses to inspire the Frightful Four to new heights.
Thanks for any time and assistance provided.
by colleem - 8/10/2014 6:03 AM
I have red it :) I like the way you work with her thoughts. But i dont know how or why she would work with the henchmen in front of the club when she is on her way to the bosses.
by CorruptionCentral - 8/10/2014 7:49 AM
Colleem, thanks for responding. In writing this chapter I made the assumption that readers had some familiarity with 'the bar with no name' and maybe that was a big assumption. In case you aren't familiar, 'The bar with no name' is a place referred to and occasionally shown in Marvel comics that caters solely to heavy hitter villains. You'll never see a Magneto or Doctor Doom there, but the Wreaking Crew, Frightful Four, and their ilk are definitely regulars. The place also seems to move regularly with no explanation of how or how the client can always find it but not the authorities.
After Sue has been treated with the Personality Disguiser and the subsequent thought scrub process the remove the groupie personality only embeds the groupie mindset permanently into her real personality, she discovers where the bar will be, but since it moves often, her information will only be good for a few days (putting her under additional time pressure). When she sees the thugs outside the bar, she expects them to be the bouncers (which in fact they are at that time) who will only allow know criminals in, so she expects she will have to deal with them if she wants in.
So, to answer your question, the groupie mindset has already severely impacted Sue's judgement in that she is seeking out her obsession. The closer she gets to realizing her fantasy, the stronger her obsession and the more impacted are her judgement, ethics, and morals. Add to that to achieve her first plan (and to date the only one she's been able to come up with in her current mental state where she has more in common with Harley Quinn than the Invisible Woman) she must get these thugs to let her into the bar. She knows she only has a day or two tops before the bar moves again and she will have to start from scratch. in addition, her family will be back within a week so her odds of success without detection are dwindling fast. All that time pressure and the building need of her obsession is why she deals with them.
by colleem - 8/10/2014 8:29 AM
I understand the pressure she has. The time is working against her but you mentioned right the Person i thought of. Harley Quinn. She is in my view the most "famous" groupie... but she would just have used brute force to get in. The thugs only let villains inside and fear that she could be a cop. Sure. But if Susan would beat them up or even kill one in a mistake... they would let her in. And Susan would have to deal with the fact that she had maybe killed someone or at least put them all into the next clinic.
Maybe this would be enough to heal her from her obsession but on the other side. She could build up a mental link between Violence and the Obsession.
by CorruptionCentral - 8/10/2014 10:25 AM
I see your point and frankly I have always seen that the violence reaction is quite possible and will eventually be an accepted reaction for Sue. Right now I see her as still in the phase where she is rationalizing her addictive behavior. Since she has already conceded that she must have sex with the objects of her obsession, which is obviously cheating on her husband (who she is already building quite a grudge against for opposing the Frightful Four as well as standing in the way of her dreams) and betraying her family (who she also resents for standing in her was and will soon start to hate) fucking anyone else to get what she needs is just going to be like mental masturbation while she imagines its one of the Frightful Four screwing her.
In other words, she is well on the way to madness, but hasn't completely jumped into it yet, so she still has some resistance to violent crime... For now.
by solddate - 8/10/2014 11:18 AM
Just though I'd pipe up and say I've really enjoyed your Groupie line so far Corrupt , just as we discussed is the pornstar idea that gets my mind ticking, but unfortunately not nearly as smoothly as yours does. The ideas you've put forward are very interesting and I'm definitely interested to see how the Muses direct Sue.
I can definitely see the logic she's following in trying to reach her obsession, essentially anything goes if it enables her to reach the Frightful Four without the rest of world finding out. I wouldn't mind seeing the gravity of her actions hitting her when she finally gets to the point of fucking one of the members before it all being washed in her euphoria.
by CorruptionCentral - 8/10/2014 7:24 PM
SoldDate, C. King, and Colleem, thank you very much for your input. I appreciate your time and comments. I think know what I want to do next and will post it soon. Thanks again
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colleem - 9/27/2014 1:06 PM
Depends on the Villain i would say :) but i think the best results would be a combination of many different Methods.
C.King - 9/27/2014 12:43 PM
Question: What mind control device and techniques would be best to make a super a willing pornstar? Or should I make one up?
Drake G. Reaper - 9/27/2014 10:41 AM
Well I've updated the Bimbotech storyline with a possible plot twist that could develop. :)
Grimmer - 9/26/2014 12:09 PM
Well let me know if you have any ideas for this storyline beyond Diana discovering that absolutely every hero, villain, male and female alike, are as fat and slothful as she and Bruce are.
burke_rakers - 9/26/2014 11:34 AM
Thanks, Grimmer. Man oh man, this has been a rough few months. Every time I THINK I've got everything under control, someone I was counting on goes off the rails or some system breaks down. I got home last night, looked at my computer, and said "I'v
ESchorcho - 9/26/2014 10:35 AM
gothamalleyviper, glad you like the new chapters. I will not have time to add anything to Rubber Queen before the weekend so I look forward to your next chapter.
Grimmer - 9/26/2014 10:14 AM
Burke, thanks for updating one of my options for Random Romance. Expect a continuing chapter from me in the future. And don't worry, I won't rush to enact another change, as I know that's an issue you've had with my work in the past on Forever Changing
gothamalleyviper - 9/25/2014 6:39 PM
ESChorcho, I like it, I am going to post something this weekend for Rubber Queen, of you want to take the Royal Court to Dawn or Helena and Dinah to Dawn that would be help me and be interesting.
Sailor Mercury - 9/23/2014 7:45 PM
I am back. Going to try and reboot an old story I started a few years back.
gothamalleyviper - 9/14/2014 9:09 PM
Anyone want to toss me some help with a book length project over on message board?
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