Sue Storms Secret Life - Supervillain Groupie

by CorruptionCentral - 8/9/2014 5:38 PM

Well, apparently either no one read or no one liked my last addition to that story. If anyone did read it please let me know, whether good or bad, you thought of it. Just looking for feedback to better hit my audience.

If you're interested, I want to expand on the group I created, the Muses of Mayhem. I think we could do interesting things with them. My current idea is to have their queen make the two Sue met release her from her deal with them so the heroine could be used by the muses to inspire the Frightful Four to new heights.
Thanks for any time and assistance provided.


RE: Sue Storms Secret Life - Supervillain Groupie

by colleem - 8/10/2014 6:03 AM

I have red it :) I like the way you work with her thoughts. But i dont know how or why she would work with the henchmen in front of the club when she is on her way to the bosses. 


RE: Sue Storms Secret Life - Supervillain Groupie

by CorruptionCentral - 8/10/2014 7:49 AM

Colleem, thanks for responding. In writing this chapter I made the assumption that readers had some familiarity with 'the bar with no name' and maybe that was a big assumption. In case you aren't familiar, 'The bar with no name' is a place referred to and occasionally shown in Marvel comics that caters solely to heavy hitter villains. You'll never see a Magneto or Doctor Doom there, but the Wreaking Crew, Frightful Four, and their ilk are definitely regulars.  The place also seems to move regularly with no explanation of how or how the client can always find it but not the authorities.

After Sue has been treated with the Personality Disguiser and the subsequent thought scrub process the remove the groupie personality only embeds the groupie mindset permanently into her real personality, she discovers where the bar will be, but since it moves often, her information will only be good for a few days (putting her under additional time pressure).  When she sees the thugs outside the bar, she expects them to be the bouncers (which in fact they are at that time) who will only allow know criminals in, so she expects she will have to deal with them if she wants in.  
So, to answer your question, the groupie mindset has already severely impacted Sue's judgement in that she is seeking out her obsession. The closer she gets to realizing her fantasy, the stronger her obsession and the more impacted are her judgement, ethics, and morals.  Add to that to achieve her first plan (and to date the only one she's been able to come up with in her current mental state where she has more in common with Harley Quinn than the Invisible Woman) she must get these thugs to let her into the bar. She knows she only has a day or two tops before the bar moves again and she will have to start from scratch. in addition, her family will be back within a week so her odds of success without detection are dwindling fast. All that time pressure and the building need of her obsession is why she deals with them.

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