X-Men Stepford Submssion

by ESchorcho - 6/2/2014 10:56 PM

Let me know what you think of the Stepford Submission and where you would like to see it go from here.  All are welcome to add to it.


RE: X-Men Stepford Submssion

by MacroLass - 6/6/2014 12:04 PM

Thank you ESchorcho (and solddate).  I can't say that I'll contribute often to stories here because I just happened to have some free time yesterday to put up a chapter. 

The only thought that occurs to me immediately is about the Security Squad.  I think you want a setup like the old Valiant comic H.A.R.D.Corps (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/H.A.R.D._Corps) which was about a mercenary organization who used copied metahuman powers in normal level operatives.  Obviously they're capturing mutants to expand the range of available powers.  I'd disagree with the depowering of the mutants in the process...it makes it less of a challenge to contain them and thus decreases the number of possible story hooks.  It also gives them reasons to keep people prisoner instead of just offing the inconvenient males...

Anyway, good luck with your story.

 


RE: X-Men Stepford Submssion

by ESchorcho - 6/12/2014 5:01 PM

Loved the Rogue apprehended chapter, MacroLass.  I am trying to figure out what to do with the option with Kitten and Ororo.  I was kind of thinking of adding the chapter I wrote to this storyline too but that might get too confusing for people.  How do you think this should be handled?  I do want to keep adding to this path of the storyline, as well as the other.If others want to share their opinion or add to the storyline, please do.


RE: X-Men Stepford Submssion

by MacroLass - 6/16/2014 2:06 PM

Assuming you're willing to let my capture of Rogue stand over simply having both of them knocked out and abducted, I think merging the 2 threads back into one would serve the story best, that makes easier to keep track of. 

As far as what Ororo learns from Kitten, it depends on what her role is intended to be.   If she's intended to be Kitten's maid/bodyslave (a rather racist notion but in keeping with the times), that's one thing but if she's going to be another wife, the advice she'll give will be somewhat limited and generic (as Kitten isn't physically suited for that kind of instruction <smirk>). One idea is that T'challa might also be a Stepford backer in secret with the goal of turning Ororo away from her mutant mania and making her more suited to the royal duties of personal appearances and bearing offspring, even though he finds the project's main objective culturally bizzare and repugnant.  It's a rather radical turn but since you had the Beast go heel, I'm guessing most bets are off...

I've got an idea of what I want for Rogue but I haven't really come up with anything for Gambit so I'm just going to have him skulk around for the time being.

 


RE: X-Men Stepford Submssion

by ESchorcho - 6/16/2014 7:40 PM

I do not want Ororo to be a maid or slave.  I really want her to be a wife and for a while, she could go on dates or go clubbing as she gets sluttier and sluttier with her conditioning.  I see Ororo having her body worked on so she gets curvier and curvier until she is as big-titted and voluptuous as every other Stepford woman.  I could also see her meeting more and more of Kitten's Stepford wife friends and she could start to learn how to be a proper Stepford woman just from being around these women.  As her body fills out the more and more slutty and vain Ororo practically begs Kitten to invite her friends to go shopping for briefer and body-revealing dresses until she finally is accepted into the whorish clique and she could be invited to be a bridesmaid for Kitten's wedding.  Kitten would want her to be a bridesmaid all along but her friends could be a little more unsure. Maybe at Kitten's wedding T'challa could be a guest?  I do like the idea of him at first showing up in Stepford and being repulsed but then he could fall prey to the subliminals that could make him more of a male-chauvinistic Stepford sympathizer.  He wouldn't be a Stepford citizen but could take Ororo away eventually to be his loyal and devoted Queen and they could visit Stepford a lot so she wouldn't fall out of the story all together.  But that is getting a little ahead of ourselves.What do you think about Ororo?  Macrolass, can't wait to see what you have in store for Rogue (or Anne-Marie)


RE: X-Men Stepford Submssion

by ESchorcho - 6/19/2014 3:31 PM

MacroLass, is Simon Trask supposed to be Victor's uncle in your most recent chapter?  Because the Trask that was mentioned in the story and had dealt with McCoy and Rao in the lab was Victor Trask, a son of Bolivar Trask that was made up for this storyline.  Just trying to keep everything straight.Loved the chapter.


RE: X-Men Stepford Submssion

by MacroLass - 6/19/2014 5:50 PM

I couldn't remember the particular Trask's name, I was in a hurry so I looked it up and the only on that was in Marvel canon besides Bolivar was Simon, so I used that one.  Assume I meant Victor.

 


RE: X-Men Stepford Submssion

by ESchorcho - 6/23/2014 2:17 PM

MacroLass, I'm looking forward to finding out who 'Mr. Burns' is.  Hopefully a new chapter following the Ororo/Kitten side of things will be up soon as well.


RE: X-Men Stepford Submssion

by ESchorcho - 6/23/2014 5:41 PM

MacroLass, I like the new chapter with the Rogue/Annie Marie and Gambit storylines but I have an issue with the Ororo path.  It was Victor that shaved her head and dished out the punishment.  He was the one who said that if she became a good Stepford woman maybe then they could revisit the topic of re-growing her hair.  Why would he then in the span of only a few hours want her to have floor-length hair?


RE: X-Men Stepford Submssion

by MacroLass - 6/24/2014 2:33 PM

Well first off, I *really* didn't like the 'punk Storm' mohawk version of her so I tried tweaking the story away from that direction.  <smirk>  I didn't think that would wreck anything.

My in story rationale is that Victor wants her to *suffer* as an outlet for his anger and that the bald thing wasn't severe enough so he goes the opposite way, making it another physical impairment but fetishizing it to help break her self image. 

Regardless, it was just a suggestion so disregard it if you wish.  I won't be offended.

 


RE: X-Men Stepford Submssion

by ESchorcho - 7/17/2014 10:00 AM

MacroLass, as I mentioned on the Wall, the Ororo path has now caught up with your own path for her.  She has been brought away to have her mutant abilities taken away.  I guess I would prefer for her to be left out of the whole Hammer side-storyline with that going on in the background as Ororo is made into the perfect Stepford woman.I am interested to see where you take all of this now that everything should be happening around the same time if I'm not mistaken.


RE: X-Men Stepford Submssion

by MacroLass - 7/23/2014 1:23 PM

Well, about Ororo...Rao was sent to kill Trask but that doesn't mean she gets there in time or is able to interfere.  I just want to get those two threads of this story reasonably close together, at least for the time being.

RE the Gambit thread...I'm trying to work out in my head who'd be appropriate for the party (I forget the name you gave the neighborhood in Stepford that they're in).  I can think of 2 main parameters: No mutants (since the mutants and the removal of their powers is the primary thrust of the main town) and no insanely powerful and uber famous heroines (ie Wonder Woman, Power Girl, Captain Marvel, etc.).  I admit I'm breaking my own rule with Sue Storm as the Fuckerware agent...but she's actually a repurposed LMD sex droid...

I'm assuming the reason these attractive and eminently fuckable women have been exiled to their own neighborhood is that A) they don't fit in with the original purpose of reducing the mutant population and B) their powers/abilities are not transferable by Trask's process...either because they're a product of physique (such as Barda or Titania) or the result of intense training.

Sadly, most of them won't fit into the cool "preverted name" mold but since they're just window dressing anyway it doesn't matter that much.

Anyway, a possible list for the party:  Batwoman, Huntress, Daughters of the Dragon (Misty Knight and Colleen Wing), Stargirl, White Tiger. 

If anyone else has suggestions for party guests, please let me know.


RE: X-Men Stepford Submssion

by ESchorcho - 7/23/2014 3:17 PM

I was originally thinking that this would only be set in the Marvel universe, but with the hinting inclusion of Big Barda, I now like the idea of a 'mixed' universe and it would be fun to open it up a bit to the DC as well.  A now straight, Stepfordized Batwoman would definitely work, a younger slightly naive Stargirl would also be fun.  Could also do more characters like Wolfsbane (Rahne Sinclair), Tigra or Cheetah from the DC universe to play up this more "exiled" part of Stepford.  The real interesting thing would be the sluts' attitudes.  I see them all like Bardi is, overly eager to please.For Trask, I think the storyline would be more interesting if he doesn't die but I would be open to an alternate to that.  I think it would be fun to see Kitten lead Ororo further and further down the Stepford rabbit hole, living their lives, meeting new Stepford women, as Ororo is made more and more into a true Stepford woman, and they are perfectly happy but there is this secret war going on between Trask and Hammer in the background.What do you think?

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Hey sorry ESchorcho, busy couple of weeks. Could you send it to thisisizzy@gmail.com? Thanks again.
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Marvel's current events are real good ideas for stories!
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Coming out of lurking / semi retirement to join the chorus of approval for Ghosthands latest update. Inspired stuff. Hoping I'll be contributing again before year is out :)
ESchorcho - 11/17/2014 11:19 AM
I'm going to echo secondchance's compliments, Ghosthand. Excellent Wonder Woman's Hooker Adventure chapter. Keep up the great work!
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Well Done Ghosthand on the Wonder Woman's Hooker adventure. I have ideas for Sammie at her new digs at the Candy Goose. I will take a shot at that soon and we can see what happens next for Dee :-)
ESchorcho - 11/12/2014 3:41 PM
What's your email, Dendro? That storyline is one of the only ones from the old Addventure that I have.
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Hey ESchorcho, I was a fan of some of your work that was on the old Superstories. Do you have any copies of Buffy In Hell?
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Elschoro. I won´t write anything new for a long time i think :) Feel free to add something new to the Dracula Story :)



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