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by gothamalleyviper - 6/16/2014 4:21 AM

I got to say, you brought the characters into a dark and humiliating place fast and effectively.  In the stories of characters being brought low, I have to say, good job!


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by secondchance - 6/16/2014 6:28 AM

Exidor455:  I agree with GAV.  You so well at bringing out the darkness of the heroines as they fall into corruption. You also have a good pace to your writing.   I especially like your addition to Vice Becomes her, but I am a bit biased on that one.

Unfortunately I tend not to be able to write as often as I like but I have a good idea for a Dina/Tina chapter that I am working on, but I have a good Lois idea for you if you're interested.  I was thinking that Lois is attacked by a B-List villain to get Superman in a Kryptonite trap which, against all odds, actually seems to be working.  As Superman is rallying the last fading shreds of his power for a last ditch effort to escape, instead of helping him as she use to do, Lois instead stops the Man of Steel and uses the Kryptonite to torture him.  Once he collapses and can only helplessly watch, she dominates and fucks the villain into submission.  When Superman wakes up, he is in his bed and Lois is tending him like a the good worried wife.  She tells him that he was delirious from Kryptonite poisoning and what he saw was just a nightmare, but now Lois has a new 'client base'.  Every week or two, another B-Lister takes his turn.  Sound like something you would be interested in?


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by exidor455 - 6/16/2014 9:57 AM

Thanks guys! I like to explore the sexual dark side of otherwise good and virtuous ladies, but some of my ideas might not be to everyone's taste!

Secondchance - That sounds like a fine idea to me. Unfortunately I'm not too well versed in the DC universe so wouldn't be sure which were the best villains to introduce, but I'm more than happy for you to expand and/or make suggestions. :)


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by secondchance - 6/16/2014 6:15 PM

Thanks for the vote of confidence Exidor455 but looks like its mute now. Both my Lois idea and the chapter I was working on.  Oh well, probably for the better as it would have been a huge rush to get two chapters out in a short time and the chapter may have suffered for it.


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by exidor455 - 6/16/2014 7:00 PM

Secondchance - take your time and post your chapters! The beauty of this place is that stories can go in parallel directions. I want to read what you have in mind.


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CJ - 7/29/2014 1:24 PM
I just looked up variants of Susan, I actually wanted to use Zsuzsa, but figured Xuxa would be easier to remem
Evva - 7/29/2014 1:15 PM
CJ, are you really using Xuxa? http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Xuxa_1 Well, she was big at latin america and iberic countries, it is like call someone as Dolly Parton or Sade
solddate - 7/28/2014 9:05 AM
>Blue Man - Always nice to see Harley having a positive effect on writing trends. Very nice work, btw.
LesLes - 7/27/2014 4:11 PM
Wow, @Blue_man, so good and so hot! Loved the way you gave the sorceress some personality and her nice mummudrai surprise! And now I need your Tumblr recs ;)
gothamalleyviper - 7/27/2014 1:02 PM
@Colleem, put it in Message board and I will post any thoughts for you.
LesLes - 7/27/2014 12:23 PM
@colleem: post it on the messageboard and I'm sure someone will take a look?
colleem - 7/27/2014 10:09 AM

colleem - 7/27/2014 3:58 AM
Would someone be so kind and look over my chapter? Will write one soon but english isnt my native
ESchorcho - 7/23/2014 3:19 PM
Great chapter, MacroLass. Thanks for adding. Check the message board.
MacroLass - 7/23/2014 12:42 PM
Ask and ye shall receive. I just wrote a new chapter.



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