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by gothamalleyviper - 6/16/2014 4:21 AM

I got to say, you brought the characters into a dark and humiliating place fast and effectively.  In the stories of characters being brought low, I have to say, good job!


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by secondchance - 6/16/2014 6:28 AM

Exidor455:  I agree with GAV.  You so well at bringing out the darkness of the heroines as they fall into corruption. You also have a good pace to your writing.   I especially like your addition to Vice Becomes her, but I am a bit biased on that one.

Unfortunately I tend not to be able to write as often as I like but I have a good idea for a Dina/Tina chapter that I am working on, but I have a good Lois idea for you if you're interested.  I was thinking that Lois is attacked by a B-List villain to get Superman in a Kryptonite trap which, against all odds, actually seems to be working.  As Superman is rallying the last fading shreds of his power for a last ditch effort to escape, instead of helping him as she use to do, Lois instead stops the Man of Steel and uses the Kryptonite to torture him.  Once he collapses and can only helplessly watch, she dominates and fucks the villain into submission.  When Superman wakes up, he is in his bed and Lois is tending him like a the good worried wife.  She tells him that he was delirious from Kryptonite poisoning and what he saw was just a nightmare, but now Lois has a new 'client base'.  Every week or two, another B-Lister takes his turn.  Sound like something you would be interested in?


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by exidor455 - 6/16/2014 9:57 AM

Thanks guys! I like to explore the sexual dark side of otherwise good and virtuous ladies, but some of my ideas might not be to everyone's taste!

Secondchance - That sounds like a fine idea to me. Unfortunately I'm not too well versed in the DC universe so wouldn't be sure which were the best villains to introduce, but I'm more than happy for you to expand and/or make suggestions. :)


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by secondchance - 6/16/2014 6:15 PM

Thanks for the vote of confidence Exidor455 but looks like its mute now. Both my Lois idea and the chapter I was working on.  Oh well, probably for the better as it would have been a huge rush to get two chapters out in a short time and the chapter may have suffered for it.


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by exidor455 - 6/16/2014 7:00 PM

Secondchance - take your time and post your chapters! The beauty of this place is that stories can go in parallel directions. I want to read what you have in mind.


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Grimmer - 7/27/2015 7:32 PM
Les, these are both great chapters. Think I'll continue from the Atlee direction though. Expect my next chapter in a couple days and might write two, one following the heroines, the other the villainesses.
LesLes - 7/27/2015 4:59 PM
@Grimmer, hope one of those suits!
colleem - 7/25/2015 3:46 PM
You getting better ^^ only 2 this time :)
Amiee - 7/25/2015 1:59 PM
Dammit, multiple posts again!
Amiee - 7/25/2015 1:43 PM
Hey guys, some feedback on my story would be much appreciated! See the thread in the message board :)
Amiee - 7/25/2015 1:28 PM
Hey guys, some feedback on my story would be much appreciated! See the thread in the message board :)
Amiee - 7/25/2015 1:05 PM
Hey guys, some feedback on my story would be much appreciated! See the thread in the message board :)
C.King - 7/24/2015 9:09 AM
Pheromone My Lovely is a good episode as it can be adjusted for any setting with a few changes. The fanfic gave the suggestions of using Red K to work on Kryptonians.
gothamalleyviper - 7/23/2015 5:59 PM
ES replied.
mercury01 - 7/22/2015 6:49 PM
My apologies, Anzaleth, if I repeated anything in your chapter. I was already mostly finished when I saw your post.



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