HHH Discussion

by solddate - 4/7/2014 9:27 AM

>Colleem: I can certainly appreciate why you'd not be into purely FF stuff, for the same reason that I am really, we all have our tastes. I'd love for you to add to HHH. I've been writing and planning numerous ideas for it, one essentially being to turn Barbara into Harley's spy in a sense.

I don't know how familiar you are with the whole thread, but on the recurring ideas is to give the girl's two new names. One a new 'real' name, so for Barbara I'd personally turn her into 'Barbie', and superslut alias which replaces the superheroine name. The thoughts I've had with my friends ESchorcho and Clifford.cao are to turn 'Oracle' into 'Big Sister' as a reference to Big Brother from the book 1984, where she's always watching her fellow slaves and her Mistress' enemies through her network of cameras. And the plan would be for her to deceive the Bat-clan as long as she can and help her Harley reign in more of the Gotham heroines.


RE: HHH Discussion

by colleem - 4/7/2014 1:34 PM

Have followed it as it came out but now i have to reread it I fear :) I will try to write something tomorrow about it (german Time) I have an Idea about it and how i want to bring it to Life. I will follow your advice and call her Big Sister, even if i dont know the Book you mentioned :) 


RE: HHH Discussion

by solddate - 4/7/2014 6:24 PM

I don't know the book either to be honest, it's just so famous as a basic concept it's worked itself into the general consciousness, even got a fly on the wall reality show named after it. The idea behind Big Brother is that it's the writer's beliefs of what would happen if the west adopted the Soviet Union's communist government structure, where the government keep constant watch on the people and to individual thought and idealism so that their power is never threatened.

If you've like an easier version to re-read, I've posted the thread I'm following to AFF.org. I've edited some of the mistakes I made and given credit where credit's due obviously, clifford's been helping me post there. http://comics.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600061113


RE: HHH Discussion

by colleem - 4/8/2014 2:15 AM

Hope you like it :) I tried to explain on a propper way why Babs should change Sides without her MInd rebelling against it. It is a bit similiar to the Red Hood story so i had a good hint for it. 


RE: HHH Discussion

by solddate - 4/8/2014 10:19 AM

I definitely like the ideas you've put forward colleem. :) Rewriting Oracle's memories is a genius way aligning her loyalties with Harley.

Yet, I'm guessing English is not your first language. Now, please don't take that the wrong way, the effort and thought you've put in is obvious and I will not take away from that. However, if you'll indulge me, I've taken what you've written, expanded it out and smoothed it out a bit. 
Now, admittedly, I've added in an extra scene at the end, from where the italics end, but I still consider what's there your post. It's what it got me to envision and imagine, so if YOU want to, I invite you to copy and paste what's there over the original form of your post.
Now, to be clear, I'm NOT forcing this on you. It's YOUR choice. I'm just an utter control freak and pretty much anointed myself as editor of the storyline. I understand completely if you don't want to change your post.


RE: HHH Discussion

by colleem - 4/8/2014 11:17 AM

 damn :-( I see now how bad my chapters are ;-) I love your work on my chapter and if you allow I will copy/paste it into my chapter replacing it fully. 


RE: HHH Discussion

by solddate - 4/8/2014 11:56 AM

Again, colleem, your post is NOT bad. It's very good with great ideas in it. I did not write that edited chapter from scratch, I wrote it from your post and wouldn't have been able to do so any other way. :)

So yes, if you are happy to, please replace your original post with this edited version. And if I can have your permission, I'd then like to post the chapter to the version of the story line that is posted on adult-fantiction.org.


RE: HHH Discussion

by colleem - 4/8/2014 12:05 PM

Sure ;-) do it :-) 


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Gorel - 7/15/2018 5:58 PM
I've always believed that a post around 1000-1500 words is a good chapter.
colleem - 7/15/2018 3:40 PM
Ups Lol
extreme1 - 7/15/2018 3:20 PM
I thought you were talking about the size of of the words used in the chapter. Anything less than 10 letters in a word and it's to be ignored!
colleem - 7/15/2018 3:20 PM
Ups Lol
Solarsearcher - 7/15/2018 2:33 PM
Oh, you thought I was talking about “chapter” size...
colleem - 7/15/2018 1:28 PM
creating Atmosphere. Then it is good written i say :)
colleem - 7/15/2018 1:27 PM
i am with Solar :) Size matters IF it is used good :) Chapters should have a certain depth to the Story and should create an Atmosphere that is more than 200 Words long :) But it is hard to say a chapter is long or short! it has to be well written and
Solarsearcher - 7/15/2018 12:13 PM
Contrary to what you may or may not have been told... size matters...
zahnskye - 7/15/2018 4:09 AM
If I write something super long it is because I'm trying to write more than one scene and sometimes I cannot fit everything I want into a short post.
zahnskye - 7/15/2018 4:08 AM
Also, short isn't bad. If you think of this site as a cyoa site (which it is) then each chapter should be written as one scene in a novel. Scenes are usually short and should serve a point.



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