The First Change Corrections

by gothamalleyviper - 2/10/2014 5:28 PM

Evva, I am not trying to be a jerk, but I took the liberty of going throw your post and editing it.  You can use this to update your post if you want.  Or Not.  Personally I can tell English is not your first langue, so I hope this helps.  Personally I would like to know what is your primary langue and see your first draft in that langue.

The first change By Evva

<span style='color: black; font-family: "Arial","sans-serif"; font-size: 10pt; mso-fareast-font-family: "Times New Roman";'>The night had just fallen over San Francisco, covering the sky with a long and dark star spangled tapestry. While it was very different from the usual Gotham City night, it was a very welcome change for Robin. He just spent a whole month hunting heroin shipments coming from Asia directly to Gotham for distribution to the east coast. A lot of hard work for both him and his on again off again girlfriend Stephanie Brown, also known as the Batgirl. By the end of this week their operation worked very well. The shipment had been burnt, the boat was on the ocean bottom, and all with no causalities!  The Zodiac Tong lost hundreds of millions dollars on this transaction!  Both he and Stephanie agreed what they did over a Chinatown rooftop one night was just to relieve the tension and not the return of their relationship.

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<span style='color: black; font-family: "Arial","sans-serif"; font-size: 10pt; mso-fareast-font-family: "Times New Roman";'>A long weekend on monitor watch at the titan tower was called for.  It was where he and Connor could spend some quality time, chat and maybe even relax for a while.  He had been welcomed by the tower permanent residents when all of that changed; all the horizon line looked like a huge blood red crack and it was leaking with some strange white-purple light which bathed the room for a while. It didn't matter where Tim looked, he just was saw this crack and the strange light.

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<span style='color: black; font-family: "Arial","sans-serif"; font-size: 10pt; mso-fareast-font-family: "Times New Roman";'>Suddenly there was a white-purplish flash which bathed the Titans Tower, it slowly faded away and the deep blood red crack all around the tower closed. Where Timothy Jackson Wayne (Drake before the adoption) had been there was another person. She wasn't wearing the usual red, and black red robin uniform. The uniform looked very close to Tim's uniform, except she wasn't wearing a cowl, but just a mask very close to kind the Huntress wore, letting her mid back hair flow freely over her back. The girl was about the same height as Timothy and had very similar body language. She stood exactly where Timothy had been and she was looking very confused, like Tim did.

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<span style='color: black; line-height: 107%; font-family: "Arial","sans-serif"; font-size: 10pt; mso-fareast-font-family: "Times New Roman";'>"Where am I?  What are my teen mates? Why are is a boy at the Muses tower?" she said trying to not look like she still in control over the situation.

-RE: The First Change Corrections by Evva - 2/11/2014 8:20 AM
--RE: The First Change Corrections by gothamalleyviper - 2/11/2014 8:25 PM

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Gorel - 8/17/2017 7:17 AM
Phew... Been a while. Let me know if anyone wants to add or give feedback.
exidor455 - 8/15/2017 8:27 AM
No prob ESchorcho - just laying out some options for where things could go next. I hope you get time to write something soon. :)
ESchorcho - 8/15/2017 6:25 AM
Thanks for adding to the Mephisto storyline, exidor455 and great work! I'll try to work on chapters coming up here. I've been pretty busy recently but will try to write something for it.
exidor455 - 8/15/2017 1:28 AM
I'm having a go at getting SSSL/Mephisto moving again. :)
colleem - 8/13/2017 1:36 AM
@King :) Everything works here (execpt the Homepage itself^^) The only wish i had would be a writer that puts some effort into the Story. Background length character depth and so on :)
exidor455 - 8/12/2017 6:07 PM
Sorry Ruleradvent, I was a bit shitty there. But I hate non-chapters. If you're going to write something, write something. :)
exidor455 - 8/12/2017 6:00 PM
Ruleradvent - figure out how this works. It's not rocket science.
kingofthefarmyard1 - 8/12/2017 11:08 AM
I might try my hand at a new story. Any suggestions?
bambucea09 - 8/10/2017 5:23 AM
Were Spiderman goes into a alternative universe were are just females in. So is no transgender here.
bambucea09 - 8/10/2017 5:23 AM
This is a alternative universe were are just F like the one from Ultimate Spiderman, Spiderverse episode



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