Story with Strong willed Heroes :)

by colleem - 10/13/2013 6:31 AM

Hi there :)

I would like to start a Story were the Super-Heroes are a bit stronger minded. I like the Story from Ivy that is now again filled with new ideas but the thought that a Hero like Batman is so fast overmatched isn´t something right i think. 

I would like to start a story with more focus on the Story and not the Sexual act. Okay nobody says that both things couldn´t be combinated but i think it would be hard for someone to hold control over such a super being or a high trained person like Batman. It could end in a fight between minds and Willpower.


The villains could try to lower the resistance over the time with drugs, hypnosis and even make a short time victory. But maybe the Hero can escape their control with pure Willpower or because he is ordered to do something that is absolute wrong in his mind.

Batman maybe would never kill someone...
Wonderwoman would never betray her Homeland...

Something like that. But as Story continues maybe the Villains would find a way to overmatch them. Everybody will break with enough time and effort. 

How do you think about this?


RE: Story with Strong willed Heroes :)

by solddate - 10/19/2013 5:49 PM

I believe you have a very good point Colleem. 


In any official story, as fans would all expect a certain amount of definitive resistance from heroes and heroines, even villains if they were controlled and ordered to go against a believe they hold dear. 

It's why I believe the most exciting parts about mind control on superheroines (I'm male and straight so I don't really look at mind controlling heroes as exciting) is first an accumulative building up of the villain's methods with detailed descriptions of what they involve and the resulting effect they have, both from an outside view and from the view of the heroine being controlled. So, in other words, I want to know both why and how the mind control effects the victim both immediately and over time. And then the second is the victim's breaking point, where the villain reaches the limit of their control over the heroine and then breaks right threw with some final trick of the trade that allies the heroine to them completely.

Now, obviously, we can always aim for the happy ending too. It's never beyond a heroine in my view to break free of their captor's control at that breaking point, but I clearly prefer the idea of her failing completely cos I've not once allowed a heroine to escape unfortunately. However, I generally prefer not to write the master/mistress as all that cruel, whenever I have it's usually to accommodate what someone else has put. I prefer to usually write that enslavement appears to be a more pleasurable option to the victim, overriding their moral code with the want of ecstasy rather than fear of pain.

Still to each their own of course.


RE: Story with Strong willed Heroes :)

by colleem - 10/19/2013 11:16 PM

Thank you Soldate. I must say  I am happy that you see it the same way. Each of the writers here has his own ideas and likes and dislikes. I hope that you enjoy my and C.Kings story right now.

 would be happy if you would join in and bring in your ideas too. 

As most of you notice. I am no native speaker and I hope always that someone else can understand what I was thinking about. But I would like see more good writers in this one. 

Right now the muse not just kissed me... She has fucked my brain out hihi 


RE: Story with Strong willed Heroes :)

by solddate - 10/20/2013 8:42 AM

You more than welcome and I do often enjoy your work.


I will say I've noticed that English isn't your first language, but it doesn't hinder you as much as it does others I've seen. Plus, your style is far more in depth than numerous writers I've read so that is a major plus in my eyes. I have actually acted as an editor for Evva before, whose first language also isn't English, so if you want I can edit some of your work in the future. The key phrase is 'if you want' because certainly don't need an editor for your work to be enjoyable.

I look forward to seeing what fruit is born from the muse's labor of fucking your mind. ;)


RE: Story with Strong willed Heroes :)

by colleem - 10/20/2013 9:13 AM

Now i am honored :) Thank you very much :)

Would also like to read more from you again.

There are Writers in here that are great and some and your playing in my "personal" Top 5 :) I waited only for other so they maybe could have insert something on their own but maybe i will bring in something this evening (German Time)


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colleem - 9/27/2014 1:06 PM
Depends on the Villain i would say :) but i think the best results would be a combination of many different Methods.
C.King - 9/27/2014 12:43 PM
Question: What mind control device and techniques would be best to make a super a willing pornstar? Or should I make one up?
Drake G. Reaper - 9/27/2014 10:41 AM
Well I've updated the Bimbotech storyline with a possible plot twist that could develop. :)
Grimmer - 9/26/2014 12:09 PM
Well let me know if you have any ideas for this storyline beyond Diana discovering that absolutely every hero, villain, male and female alike, are as fat and slothful as she and Bruce are.
burke_rakers - 9/26/2014 11:34 AM
Thanks, Grimmer. Man oh man, this has been a rough few months. Every time I THINK I've got everything under control, someone I was counting on goes off the rails or some system breaks down. I got home last night, looked at my computer, and said "I'v
ESchorcho - 9/26/2014 10:35 AM
gothamalleyviper, glad you like the new chapters. I will not have time to add anything to Rubber Queen before the weekend so I look forward to your next chapter.
Grimmer - 9/26/2014 10:14 AM
Burke, thanks for updating one of my options for Random Romance. Expect a continuing chapter from me in the future. And don't worry, I won't rush to enact another change, as I know that's an issue you've had with my work in the past on Forever Changing
gothamalleyviper - 9/25/2014 6:39 PM
ESChorcho, I like it, I am going to post something this weekend for Rubber Queen, of you want to take the Royal Court to Dawn or Helena and Dinah to Dawn that would be help me and be interesting.
Sailor Mercury - 9/23/2014 7:45 PM
I am back. Going to try and reboot an old story I started a few years back.
gothamalleyviper - 9/14/2014 9:09 PM
Anyone want to toss me some help with a book length project over on message board?



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