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Susan Richards was preparing dinner when suddenly two figures appeared in front of her: one was the Wizard, the leader of the Fantastic Four, and the other was someone she didn't know.
"What the devil's going on here?" the Wizard demanded, obviously as confused as Susan was.
"Oh, I just want to make certain Mr. Fantastic won't be a problem," the Melder said, "and this seems to be the most interesting way of doing it."
Then he fired.
* * *
Felicia Strange -- who was thinking of changing her thief name to "Dr. Cat" -- floating through the sky.
Her hair fluttered behind her along with her cloak -- in a sexy reversal of Dr. Strange's style, her platinum hair had two black streaks on it.
She was feeling horny, which wasn't anything new. Felicia was tempted to return home and enjoy her manservant's huge cock. That was the main reason she kept Wong around, or "Wang" as she liked to call him.
But it would be great to bump into that dishy Spiderman so that Dr. Cat could show him what a REAL woman was like, instead of that cow he was married to....
* * *
Susan Wittman, the "Invisible Wizard," returned back to her cooking. She looked almost the same as Susan, though was a little older, a little taller, a slightly longer face, and her hair was only dyed blonde.
She remembered that she used to be two people, but there was no way she would ever go back: she had the beauty and power of the Invisible Woman and the genius of the Wizard, a perfect combination.
Susan Wittman would show that fool Richards who was the bigger genius. Oh, she still loved him, but it had to be love on HER terms. When he acknowledged she was his superior, when he was willing to cater to her every desire.
She headed for Richards' lab, ready to prepare a surprise for him....
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XFAN - 3/7/2014 5:11 PM
I'm aware of the differences, including Uranus/Neptune not being cousins, I honestly used the Americanized name because Lita is easier to type a dozen times. Ami is phonetically the same in both versions so it wasn't obvious.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:36 PM
However, it is your story, so you can do what you want. I just thought I should at least let you know.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:34 PM
One other thing. When (or even if you plan to use them), Haruka/Uranus and Neptune/Michiru are NOT cousins. In fact they are a lesbian couple! Wasn't sure if you knew that or not. But thought you might have fun with a chapter with them.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:32 PM
For the others; Venus is Minako, Moon is Usagi, Mars is Rei, Saturn is Hotaru, Chibi Moon is Chibi-Usa, Uranus is Haruka, Neptune is Michiru, and Pluto is Setsuna.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:29 PM
Love the new chapter, but I only have 1 problem with it. That is, that you used Jupiter's Americanized name. He original Japanese name is Makoto.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:36 AM
Will do, thanks for letting me know.
C.King - 3/7/2014 10:32 AM
Grimmer. The wall is for quick non-permanent communication. For longer and permanent, like hashing out stories, use the message board.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:19 AM
C. King, one more thing since I can't seem to get the hang of PM's for this site. Anyway, I'm in this till the end of the story if you're up for it.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:01 AM
Basically have the story end with Diana, Bruce, and their harem happy and content with the Master PC vanishing to another universe once it's work is done.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:01 AM
I don't want Diana to be too corrupted by the Master PC, just a general lowering of what inhibitions she has. Maybe have some guilt that Bruce helps her overcome as they near the end of their harem building.
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