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The clothes that Jade now wore consisted of a tacky black PVC halter-neck top which zipped
up the front with a plunging neckline; a red lace suspender-belt and seamed black stockings; and over that, a microscopically short black leather miniskirt with a zip all the way up one side the skirt was so short that it cleared the stocking-tops by a couple
of inches anyway and very little, was left to the imagination.Tina smiled as she gave the new whore her instructions. As Jade walked the short distance to the street corner that Tina had chosen for her to work, her cheap, five inch heels clicked noisily on
the pavement , she turned a corner and gazed upon the street. This was “Hooker’s Alley”. A place where the police avoided and the lowest of the cities whores, old and young came to ply their trade . She walked confidently to a corner that had a street lamp
above it . jade felt no nerves at all as she stopped and stood under the lamp light, her hand on her hip and chewing tartily at a piece of gum.
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XFAN - 3/7/2014 5:11 PM
I'm aware of the differences, including Uranus/Neptune not being cousins, I honestly used the Americanized name because Lita is easier to type a dozen times. Ami is phonetically the same in both versions so it wasn't obvious.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:36 PM
However, it is your story, so you can do what you want. I just thought I should at least let you know.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:34 PM
One other thing. When (or even if you plan to use them), Haruka/Uranus and Neptune/Michiru are NOT cousins. In fact they are a lesbian couple! Wasn't sure if you knew that or not. But thought you might have fun with a chapter with them.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:32 PM
For the others; Venus is Minako, Moon is Usagi, Mars is Rei, Saturn is Hotaru, Chibi Moon is Chibi-Usa, Uranus is Haruka, Neptune is Michiru, and Pluto is Setsuna.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:29 PM
Love the new chapter, but I only have 1 problem with it. That is, that you used Jupiter's Americanized name. He original Japanese name is Makoto.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:36 AM
Will do, thanks for letting me know.
C.King - 3/7/2014 10:32 AM
Grimmer. The wall is for quick non-permanent communication. For longer and permanent, like hashing out stories, use the message board.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:19 AM
C. King, one more thing since I can't seem to get the hang of PM's for this site. Anyway, I'm in this till the end of the story if you're up for it.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:01 AM
Basically have the story end with Diana, Bruce, and their harem happy and content with the Master PC vanishing to another universe once it's work is done.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:01 AM
I don't want Diana to be too corrupted by the Master PC, just a general lowering of what inhibitions she has. Maybe have some guilt that Bruce helps her overcome as they near the end of their harem building.
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