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Storm and Susan looked through the Baxter Building. Searching for Susan's brother, Johnny a.k.a. the Human Torch.
"There he is." Susan said, finding him in the building's training room. She made Storm invisible again and got ready to start the first step of her plan to take down her brother, as was her queen's command.
"Hey, bro!" a voice said. He looked over and saw Sue.
"Sis, hey where ya been? Reed's thinking you were taken by Hornet Queen" Johnny said.
"Oh, I've been, 'out'," she said "and I learned a few tricks."
"Oh, so I really guess you CAN teach an old dog new tricks. Johnny said laughing.
"Ha, ha, ha." Susan said sarcastically. "You think your just such 'hot stuff', don't you?"
"Well I am flammin hot!" he said.
"All YOU are is just a 'hot head'. Let me show you why I am much hotter than you." Sue said with a chuckle. She had to admit, even though she hated hearing Johnny's 'fire' jokes, they were fun to say.
Before Johnny's eyes his sister erupted into flames into a fire-like form of herself made of blue flames. "Now let's see just who's the hotter sibling." she said, as she began to fly, and launched a large blast of blue flames at him.
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XFAN - 3/7/2014 5:11 PM
I'm aware of the differences, including Uranus/Neptune not being cousins, I honestly used the Americanized name because Lita is easier to type a dozen times. Ami is phonetically the same in both versions so it wasn't obvious.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:36 PM
However, it is your story, so you can do what you want. I just thought I should at least let you know.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:34 PM
One other thing. When (or even if you plan to use them), Haruka/Uranus and Neptune/Michiru are NOT cousins. In fact they are a lesbian couple! Wasn't sure if you knew that or not. But thought you might have fun with a chapter with them.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:32 PM
For the others; Venus is Minako, Moon is Usagi, Mars is Rei, Saturn is Hotaru, Chibi Moon is Chibi-Usa, Uranus is Haruka, Neptune is Michiru, and Pluto is Setsuna.
Sailor Mercury - 3/7/2014 4:29 PM
Love the new chapter, but I only have 1 problem with it. That is, that you used Jupiter's Americanized name. He original Japanese name is Makoto.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:36 AM
Will do, thanks for letting me know.
C.King - 3/7/2014 10:32 AM
Grimmer. The wall is for quick non-permanent communication. For longer and permanent, like hashing out stories, use the message board.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:19 AM
C. King, one more thing since I can't seem to get the hang of PM's for this site. Anyway, I'm in this till the end of the story if you're up for it.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:01 AM
Basically have the story end with Diana, Bruce, and their harem happy and content with the Master PC vanishing to another universe once it's work is done.
Grimmer - 3/7/2014 10:01 AM
I don't want Diana to be too corrupted by the Master PC, just a general lowering of what inhibitions she has. Maybe have some guilt that Bruce helps her overcome as they near the end of their harem building.
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